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[Rudger offline]

I have recently been engaged in writing a fanfic to pass time. I havent gotten far enough into it to figure out a title and even though I have written four chapters I have only put up my first one here. I would like some constructive critisism so I know if I should continue or just give it up before I embaress myself. Thanks

There is some swearing so I'm gonna go with a T for Teen rating on this.

no touchy

[jarkobubbles84 offline]

Nice chapter 1, I liked it, just next time get rid of the all-centered stuff, okay? That gets a bit annoying after a while, but I like the plot line so far, you get an 8/10 so far. Bye for now!

Jarkobubbles84


PS I'm an author there too! This is my first post here. Bye now!

[Rudger offline]

Chapter three has arrived. Not like anybody cares but anyone who remembers GK will hopefully get a kick out of it.
this now has moderate swearing so I am not sure what to rate it.

Ok, seeing as nobody has anything to say about it and the ony response besides answers to my poll was to get the next chapter out, Im just going to write one more chapter. After I update it in about a month, If nobody responds to it I will just delete the story off of fanfiction.net and stop bugging you all about it. Sound good? aw who am I kidding, Idont think anybody has even read it yet besides maybe Sithking so I give. I just dont have what it takes to write a great fanfic like Blast Into The Past. Mine doesn't even have a name.
Chapter2
Chapter3

[Rudger offline]

Sorry for the double post.
Even though I put it there as a joke, at least one person thinks I should give up. So just read the last post to see my response. I am posting a new post to bring attention to the fact that I have re written chapter three after realizing how bad the grammer was. I also added a new scene to it. I have fixed most of the grammer but I probably just missed the rest. please read and reply with any comments, good or bad. Thank you.

[Shademan v.39 offline]

It actually looks pretty good, though I don't suggest centering the text. Most people prefer to read text that's on the left side on the screen or page. Other than that, it looks pretty good.

As for the title, try basing it on what the entire plot of the story is about.

I'll be looking forward to any other chapters you'll be putting up.

[Rudger offline]

It actually looks pretty good, though I don't suggest centering the text. Most people prefer to read text that's on the left side on the screen or page. Other than that, it looks pretty good.

As for the title, try basing it on what the entire plot of the story is about.

I'll be looking forward to any other chapters you'll be putting up.

Thanks but I dont even know what its about yet. Im writing off the top of my head. and as for the centered text every time I write a chapter it looks good left side when I print it out and then when I put it on the net it stretches over the whole screen instead of being paper size and it doesnt look right to me. Your the second one to tell me this so I'm going to change it even if I dont like it. I appreciate your input. Thanks again.

Edit: I replaced them. Does that look better?

[Shademan v.39 offline]

Yeeeees, it looks MUCH better!!

From what I've read, it seems that it's basically about you starting a new life in Kadic Jr. High, and becoming part of the Lyoko team. With that being said, maybe you should make a title that pertains to never being the same, crossing the point of no return (lifewise), destiny choosing you and all wonderfulness stuff. Something like "Destiny's Chosen" or something more familiar, like "Memoirs of Rudger: Life As A Kadic Student", or something similar. Sky's the limit as to what to name the fic.

Update soon!!

[Sithking Zero offline]

Or maybe "What Is Normal? Rudger's Kadic Adventures."

Or does that have more of a documentary feel?

[darktemplar offline]

Hey!

Jeremie says stiffeling a laugh

They take off weaving through the forest

They adjust themselves on their boards

I understand that you got D from English, but anyway...
Present tenses! I really hardly read this fanfiction because of these presents. I should have ignored them, but I really couldn't. Please. Don't do that again.

Anyway, plot is interesting. I'll be waiting for next chapters. So - don't give up!

[Rudger offline]

I origionally wrote the first and second chapters in the past tense but for some unknown reason I decided to switch it over to present tense and I guess I missed alot. Thanks for reminding me to fix that stuff.


LOOKIE, LOOKIE! Its finally got a name! woohoo! and it actually makes sense, to me at least.

[Shademan v.39 offline]

Like the title, Rudger! When are you going to update?

[Rudger offline]

Its finally here! the long in coming but not very awaited chapter is now on both FF.net and LFF. check it out.
As always any suggestions are welcome.

[Shademan v.39 offline]

Pretty decent chapter, though I really don't think that Mr. Delmas would cuss or call anybody who was of a different culture stupid. Herb or Sissi on the other hand...

I would definitely agree that Jeremie would flip out if he saw someone on his computer, especially if what was on there had to do with saving the world.

Nice chappie! Update soon!

[Rudger offline]

... though I really don't think that Mr. Delmas would cuss or call anybody who was of a different culture stupid.

Nice chappie! Update soon!

Thanks! new chapter is already in the works. should be up by halloween.

I'm sure Mr. Delmas wouldn't normally do that, but after me supposedly trying to kill one of his students and scaring his daughter I figured I would show a less understanding side of the man. I like to change things up a bit. like with the contest at the end. Im sure the gang would have been much more understanding than that.

[iambob offline]

it needs to get to the point so i dont like dont take it personally though

[Shademan v.39 offline]

Hmm...when you put it that way, Rudger...that would make sense. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter when it comes up!

[Rudger offline]

Chapter 5 is complete! Click the link in my sig for LFF, or go to FF.net here.

Please review! I need feedback, good and bad.

[Lyoko SA80 offline]

Well to be horest not alot of fan fiction appal to me but your has the sight .The spellingor grammer from what read is off.But I'm the same (I not winching).It's very go go humour(foot down with odd gone bak into the back ). action (fighting scence at start).Thi is only to chapter 3 but you got me hooked .So keep it up .Well done .Can't wait for the nexrt few chapter.Wondering how long do you think it going to be .

Good fiction but needs something I can't explain .But over all good job.

[Rudger offline]

Well thanks . I know what you mean. Even to me it seems to be lacking something unexplainable. I really don't know how far I'm going to drag this out. If I make it too long It will probably become boring and redundant but if I make it too short it will make me think I could have done better. I'm hoping to at least get 10-15 out of it, maybe more if I the people want more. This is probably gonna be the only Fanfic I ever write so I really want to make it good.

[Lyoko SA80 offline]

Well that all you can do really is it rud.I like how you known what type of pick up but thinking about it some people who be confused .Personally I had to goggle image it (I want that one ).The bit when Ulrich punch rud in the face was a suprise and a good one .

Question is do I have what it takes to write a fan fic and with my spell and grammer??????????????.

[Rudger offline]

Hokay, I know people are thinking to themselves, "Stupid attention Wh*** Rudger, keeps reposting." but I'd just like to inform anyone who bothers to read my fic that I've reupdated chapter 6 with a better ending.