Never Give Up and Behind Closed Hearts

[Trillinka offline]

Thanks, HvonM! Once I get done reading Salome for my Lit class, I think I"m going to answer some reviews, hopefully I'll get to yours tonight! I'm really loving that reply to reviewer thing, I feel like I can talk better to the readers that way. It makes me so happy inside ^_^

Ok, you want a spoiler? If I was evil I'd just give you the first word.. and I am evil! But.. not that bad! The chapter this spoiler is from won't be coming for a while, but once it does... things will speed up!! I hope you guys like it! Remember, this is NOT the next chapter!

"You so much as breathe heavy and I swear to God I'll slit her throat," Theo snarled quietly at Yumi, his knifepoint close to Ari's exposed neck.


And that's all you get! I've given away too much already!

[HvonM offline]

*chokes* Good heavens! The intensity is building! Seriously, though, from what you've given away, it seems like the story is going to take on an even darker atmosphere. NICE!

[Trillinka offline]

Why else would I have to change the rating to M?

[MY85 offline]

Why else would I have to change the rating to M?

Violence, explicit language (I can help you on that, lol), no idea actually... btw, did Theo raped Yumi in your fic so far? Seeing the way it's going, it won't happen, right?

[Trillinka offline]

So far, Yumi has not been raped... so far... I don't know quite what violent things will happen so I upped the rating, just in case.

[Trillinka offline]

Just in case any of you LF people are waiting for the next chapter and don't have the alert thing for ff.net, I have updated! If you want to discuss anything from the chapter, I'd be happy to talk it out on here or on the PMs. Let me know what you think!

[mooshie offline]

lots of emotional turmoil, tensions are high, <insert>, a good fanfic I can't think of any that I like more or have kept me caring about it for so long

[Trillinka offline]

I'm glad you like it! I'll try to update more often this summer, we'll see what happens!

[Little Vili offline]

I havent read your fanfic in months...I gotta start reading (and writing for that matter) again soon. Though I can never get as much computer time anymore...and I dont want to walk to the library.

[Agent_Marquez offline]

I havent read your fanfic in months...I gotta start reading (and writing for that matter) again soon. Though I can never get as much computer time anymore...and I dont want to walk to the library.

That was just funny.

[Trillinka offline]

I havent read your fanfic in months...I gotta start reading (and writing for that matter) again soon. Though I can never get as much computer time anymore...and I dont want to walk to the library.

Poor Vili.. I was wondering why you hadn't been around as much!

[Agent_Marquez offline]

My apologies for the spam above. I found his post funny.

Anyways, I read some parts of your story. It's like a diary fic for moments. And if it was merged to Season 2, I would try to say that Theo could be a ploymorph, given that there's no Lyoko scenes yet.

I read the last chapter. Did Theo attempted to rape Yumi?

[Trillinka offline]

My apologies for the spam above. I found his post funny.

Anyways, I read some parts of your story. It's like a diary fic for moments. And if it was merged to Season 2, I would try to say that Theo could be a ploymorph, given that there's no Lyoko scenes yet.

I read the last chapter. Did Theo attempted to rape Yumi?

I'm surprised (honored?) that you've been reading some of BCH. I tried to keep it as normal of a fic as possible, but thought the diary could give better insight into the characters' feelings rather than monologues and other methods like that. Also, it gives them a chance to explore each others' feelings without talking to the actual person. I was tempted to merge it with Season 2, but decided against it. If I had merged it,then I'd have William to worry about and would be tempted to replace Theo with him.

No, Theo has not attempted to rape Yumi yet. He hasn't really been around her for a few chapters, I think.. I need to read my own story -_-

[Agent_Marquez offline]

My apologies for the spam above. I found his post funny.

Anyways, I read some parts of your story. It's like a diary fic for moments. And if it was merged to Season 2, I would try to say that Theo could be a ploymorph, given that there's no Lyoko scenes yet.

I read the last chapter. Did Theo attempted to rape Yumi?

I'm surprised (honored?) that you've been reading some of BCH. I tried to keep it as normal of a fic as possible, but thought the diary could give better insight into the characters' feelings rather than monologues and other methods like that. Also, it gives them a chance to explore each others' feelings without talking to the actual person. I was tempted to merge it with Season 2, but decided against it. If I had merged it,then I'd have William to worry about and would be tempted to replace Theo with him.

No, Theo has not attempted to rape Yumi yet. He hasn't really been around her for a few chapters, I think.. I need to read my own story -_-

The diary is something typical of a drama and romance story. However, your story involves Romance/Action/Adventure, as stated on ff.net. No account for me yet, as I haven't even begun to write a CL story, which I might do someday. But you managed to do a great job so far, that saying I haven't finished reading all of it.

Add William, more drama. Before William existed, he was the most exploited non-main-characther to be used on love triangles.

Theo. I’m going to kill him. He won’t hurt her anymore. If he lays a finger on her again, I swear I’ll make him wish he was never born.’

That made me thought of the rape attempt, not that he already got his way with her. Sorry if I'm going to make you read your own story again.

[Trillinka offline]

Thank you. I hope you enjoy reading the rest of BCH.

I think right now, it'd be difficult for me to add William because I have a few possibilities planned out for a few chapters and maybe the ending. Sticking him in there now just wouldn't feel right to me.

Chapter 54 wrote:
Theo. I’m going to kill him. He won’t hurt her anymore. If he lays a finger on her again, I swear I’ll make him wish he was never born.’


That made me thought of the rape attempt, not that he already got his way with her. Sorry if I'm going to make you read your own story again.

I believe Ulrich was refering to the abuse that Yumi has been experiencing from Theo. I'm working on reading my story from the beginning because I'm reading it to my boyfriend over the phone. It's amazing how many errors I find that way!

[Agent_Marquez offline]

Thank you. I hope you enjoy reading the rest of BCH.

You're welcome.

I believe Ulrich was refering to the abuse that Yumi has been experiencing from Theo. I'm working on reading my story from the beginning because I'm reading it to my boyfriend over the phone. It's amazing how many errors I find that way!

I've noticed the abuse as well. And the errors are things out of context, grammar, spelling...? But one learns from their mistakes, I must say.

[Trillinka offline]

Thank you. I hope you enjoy reading the rest of BCH.

You're welcome.

I believe Ulrich was refering to the abuse that Yumi has been experiencing from Theo. I'm working on reading my story from the beginning because I'm reading it to my boyfriend over the phone. It's amazing how many errors I find that way!

I've noticed the abuse as well. And the errors are things out of context, grammar, spelling...? But one learns from their mistakes, I must say.

The errors are mostly spelling, punctuation, and a few grammar, I think. Also, sometimes I find that when it's read out loud, it doesn't sound quite right in a few spots. Someday when I have time, I'll go through and completely edit it all... but that's far in the future.

[Lyoko SA80 offline]

Sorry tov butt in like this but I am truely enjoying you work and got up to when the guys are at camp but loving it so far well done can't wait to carry on

[Trillinka offline]

You aren't butting in at all I'm glad you're enjoying BCH so far!

[Lyoko SA80 offline]

Thank's.Better be safe then sorry as it goe's.I always reading it when I am at college .Got in trouble aswell but we are not going into that

[Trillinka offline]

Thank's.Better be safe then sorry as it goe's.I always reading it when I am at college .Got in trouble aswell but we are not going into that

Ahhh, another college person! I feel out of place sometimes because I'm so old Got in trouble? That's no good!

[MY85 offline]

Thank's.Better be safe then sorry as it goe's.I always reading it when I am at college .Got in trouble aswell but we are not going into that

Ahhh, another college person!

Make that 3... and add Stonecreek, TB3 and a few around LF that go to college.

[Lyoko SA80 offline]

Cool .I didn't know that

[__lovexme. offline]

I need help on posting my story on Fanfiction.net...

[Trillinka offline]

Take it to PMs and explain what the problem is and I'll see if I can help