Lyoko Freak: 2005 - 2015. Return to the past now....

It is currently Sat Jun 21, 2025 6:39 pm

Multi-faceted

For fanfic writers/readers. Post your fics, or recommend one that you thought was good!

Moderators: The Administrators, Moderators


Multi-faceted

Postby Stonecreek » Sun Dec 11, 2005 11:58 pm

Well, I said I was going to write some CL fanfiction, and I finally did. Many thanks to FormicaArchonis for his (sorry 'bout that...) input into this. It's Odd-centric, and will get a bit darker as it goes on. The Let's Talk Tech thread might not like this, as it is probably impossible, but that's where constructive criticism comes in. Have at in, and the next part should be up by Friday.

EDIT - I hate ff.n and how they screw up document formatting. A new version is up with the breask in the right places. Hope that alleviates any confusion. And the URL works now...God, how much more could I screw this up?

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2698842/1/
User avatar
Stonecreek offline
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 6513
Joined: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:29 pm
Location: Probably at work

Postby Stonecreek » Mon Dec 12, 2005 9:15 pm

Nobody's bothered commenting on the first chapter (at least here), but the second chapter's up now. Same place as the first, so please read and review. I'd greatly appreciate constructive criticism on this, guys.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2698842/2/
User avatar
Stonecreek offline
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 6513
Joined: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:29 pm
Location: Probably at work

Postby FormicaArchonis » Fri Dec 16, 2005 1:02 am

Stonecreek wrote:Same place as the first, so please read and review. I'd greatly appreciate constructive criticism on this, guys.

I'm enjoying it. I've got to admit, I didn't expect the Millie and Tamiya angle at all. This should be interesting....

Odd's confusion (and a sense of confusion in the reader) in the second chapter is done well. We know something's wrong, and we know how it happened, but we're not sure precisely what's going on yet. I like that! It's neat to see Odd so off-balance. He's not usually one to be put in that kind of situation, not that I can recall. (I'm sure someone can correct me if I'm wrong.:)) Wisecracks are useless when he's confronting an inner fear, a place without an audience to hear his words.

Anyway, I can't wait to see what happens with this. Keep up the good work.:)
User avatar
FormicaArchonis offline
Popular Kid
Popular Kid
 
Posts: 111
Joined: Fri Dec 09, 2005 9:02 pm
Location: A basement. Your basement, my basement, I don't know. But I'm sure it's a basement.

Postby Stonecreek » Fri Dec 16, 2005 3:08 am

Well, I'm glad someone's commented on the fic/ Third chapter was going to be done today, but now it looks as if Sunday/Monday is more likely, as it's getting lengthy. This also might lead to it wrapping up in part 4, though a short epilogue is a possibility. Please, if you read it, comment on it, or I just won't post here if you don't care.
User avatar
Stonecreek offline
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 6513
Joined: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:29 pm
Location: Probably at work

Postby Stonecreek » Fri Jan 13, 2006 4:52 am

Due to remodeling at home taking away the Internet, this cahpter's been delayed for a month. But now, here is chapter three. Same link as before, folks, and please comment on it.
User avatar
Stonecreek offline
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 6513
Joined: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:29 pm
Location: Probably at work

Postby FormicaArchonis » Wed Jan 18, 2006 7:05 pm

Stonecreek wrote:Due to remodeling at home taking away the Internet, this cahpter's been delayed for a month. But now, here is chapter three. Same link as before, folks, and please comment on it.


Just got here for my weekly fanfic/art trawl. Things are really starting to get intriguing. :) Good show.
User avatar
FormicaArchonis offline
Popular Kid
Popular Kid
 
Posts: 111
Joined: Fri Dec 09, 2005 9:02 pm
Location: A basement. Your basement, my basement, I don't know. But I'm sure it's a basement.

Postby captainratchet » Wed Jan 18, 2006 10:49 pm

I liked it. Very intresting...
I don't need to change to suit the law, the law needs to change to suit me.
DreadZone
Image
User avatar
captainratchet offline
Teacher's Pet
Teacher's Pet
 
Posts: 65
Joined: Sat Oct 29, 2005 7:31 pm
Location: DreadZone Battle Dome

Postby Rycr » Wed Feb 08, 2006 4:20 am

I keep finding authors that I already know from ff.net here. I'm so glad I joined!

Anyway, as I said in my reviews, this is great so far. Please post the next chapter soon, okay?
Image
User avatar
Rycr offline
Popular Kid
Popular Kid
 
Posts: 184
Joined: Tue Feb 07, 2006 1:10 am
Location: Out of my mind

Postby Stonecreek » Wed Feb 08, 2006 3:21 pm

Workign on it, but i have a one-shot that I have to get out before inspiration vanishes. Probably this weekend, though, for the next chapter.
Image

YDV wrote:Well you see, the amount of time we didn't normally hang around BKO is kind of like potential energy, and then when we all finally came back at the same time it's like letting loose a catapult. 8D

It's all very scientifical. |D


Ah, memories...
http://z10.invisionfree.com/Anime_and_M ... hp?act=idx
User avatar
Stonecreek offline
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 6513
Joined: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:29 pm
Location: Probably at work

Postby Just_Jaine » Wed Feb 08, 2006 8:21 pm

Your stoies is realy well writen! I cant wait till you write more :D .
User avatar
Just_Jaine offline
Friend of Team Lyoko
Friend of Team Lyoko
 
Posts: 260
Joined: Fri Dec 30, 2005 11:10 pm
Location: Searching for an abandon factory!

Postby Stonecreek » Sun Feb 12, 2006 9:23 pm

Well, wait no more! Chapter four has been posted! Same link as in the thread's first post. If you would leave reviews and some constructive criticism, I'd appreciate it. Happy reading.
Image

YDV wrote:Well you see, the amount of time we didn't normally hang around BKO is kind of like potential energy, and then when we all finally came back at the same time it's like letting loose a catapult. 8D

It's all very scientifical. |D


Ah, memories...
http://z10.invisionfree.com/Anime_and_M ... hp?act=idx
User avatar
Stonecreek offline
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 6513
Joined: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:29 pm
Location: Probably at work

Postby Stonecreek » Wed May 24, 2006 7:14 pm

Sorry to double-post this, but it needed to be bumped from the graveyard for one very good reason - chapter 5 has been posted, and chapter six will be on its way next week!

Here's the link for the fifth chapter: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2698842/5/

And, if you haven't read from the beginning, here's the link to the start of the story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2698842/1/
Image

YDV wrote:Well you see, the amount of time we didn't normally hang around BKO is kind of like potential energy, and then when we all finally came back at the same time it's like letting loose a catapult. 8D

It's all very scientifical. |D


Ah, memories...
http://z10.invisionfree.com/Anime_and_M ... hp?act=idx
User avatar
Stonecreek offline
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 6513
Joined: Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:29 pm
Location: Probably at work


Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 3 guests