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Reviewer: Gravity Control Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: Nov 05, 2006 11:40 PM Title: Jeremy's family and Ulrich visit the United States

This story is a bit weird, I mean, since when did Sissi become chums with the group? And the donut thing? No matter. For some reason I can't stop reading this. I like it!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Stonecreek Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: Oct 11, 2006 03:46 PM Title: Chapter 2

You have a storyline going, but you don't need to explain everything in such exacting detail.  Nor do you need everyone to say the same thing on a seperate line.  Just have them all say the same thing, as a group.  I like your ideas, but the technique is just so flawed.  Read a book on writing.  You can do better.

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