[Report This]Date: Dec 16, 2008 02:00 AM Title: Saving Sanity
You might want to consider making double lines between each new paragraph to make it easier to read. Other than that, nothing notable you need to correct. Good job.
Author's Response: I didn't notice, I'll fix it. Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: Sep 04, 2008 02:56 AM Title: Power Surge
Good use of codes (I myself happen to know that code :P), keep trying to pull out the detail. :) If I could make a suggestion, try to equally depict the scenes on Lyoko and Earth (as in on the Replika and Translated on Earth) with equal detail, so that one scene is the focus and the other is just a shadow. I mean, just try to make sure that both scenes have enough detail in them to not leave too many questions for the reader. ^^;
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try to keep that in mind! :D
[Report This]Date: Sep 04, 2008 02:51 AM Title: Power Surge
I think you meant "doofus"...:P
Pretty good so far; just remember to try and add as much detail as you can. If you need help, I'm here for the advice I can give. :)
[Report This]Date: Aug 24, 2008 04:11 PM Title: Accidental Victory
Bit fast-paced, but the plot came across pretty well. Only advice I have to you is to try and work on detail.
Date: Aug 02, 2008 09:27 AM Title: Accidental Victory
Well, yes. But, he doesn't want to give up his only chance to be closer to the Lyoko warriors. :P Thanks for the review though!
[Report This]Date: Jul 31, 2008 03:07 PM Title: Accidental Victory
As I said somewhere else, it seems a little strange, because wouldn't this appearance of Xana provoke an outright rebellion from the Lyoko Warriors, or at least some action to stop him? But it seems good so far, so good job.
[Report This]Date: Jul 31, 2008 03:05 AM Title: The Return of Xana
Hmm...
Well as you said, it is rather short. But the plot comes across rather nicely; all you have to work on is adding detail. Good job. :)
(Having trouble remembering if I've read this before...x_x)