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From Dark Beginnings: LHR Chapter 1

Postby axslayer33 » Tue Dec 25, 2012 1:17 pm

I'll just leave this here...http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8832103/1/F ... ise-Part-1

My first fanfiction. Critics, fire away! Rated PG-13 for language, and viloence (though no violence in this chapter)

Anyone know how to edit posted stories? I screwed up some dividers....
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Re: Let Hell Rise

Postby thexanafied » Thu Dec 27, 2012 12:26 am

Not bad. Grammatically it was pretty well written and it even made me laugh a bit. i like what you did with Aelita's lip-stick tube and the paint. Cant wait for the next chapter.

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Re: Let Hell Rise

Postby axslayer33 » Thu Dec 27, 2012 9:33 pm

Thanks. Anything bad about it (And is there anyway to edit the text of a published story, or do I just delete and resubmit? I screwed up a scene divider as you might of noticed)
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Re: From Dark Beginnings: LHR Chapter 1

Postby axslayer33 » Thu Jan 03, 2013 12:17 am

Editted post for more acurate title, rating, etc.
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