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Postby Yumi Ulrich » Sun Jan 18, 2009 12:29 am

Well this is my first real fan fiction it is called "Hacked" Please rate it and tell me what I should do to make it better.

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<A HREF="http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4799576/1/Episode_1_Hacked" TITLE="Chapter 1 Hacked">Chapter 1</A>
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Postby emoBillâ„¢ » Sat Feb 14, 2009 11:19 am

Okay. Here comes an Aelita review.

It hasn’t been long after the gang agreed to shutdown the Supercomputer for good, at least for the time being. But little did they know that there was someone spying on them the whole time.

This should probably be in the summary, not as the beginning sentence. But either way, it doesn't much matter, so this is just a small thing.
[quote]“Ulrich! yelled Odd. Have you see were my little digadie dog went?â€
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Postby Yumi Ulrich » Sun Feb 15, 2009 4:03 pm

Wow. I need to change some things up I guess.
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Postby emoBillâ„¢ » Sun Feb 15, 2009 6:47 pm

I'm just a Grammar Nazi. Don't worry about it too much. I act like that with myself, too. I proofread like everything xP

So yeah. It's a habit.

And I also have no life xP
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Postby JesusFreak » Sun Feb 15, 2009 8:59 pm

Aelita should totally start sporking badfic. She's got the nazism for it. :P
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Postby emoBillâ„¢ » Sun Feb 15, 2009 9:20 pm

'Sporking badfic'? Care to explain what that means?
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Postby JesusFreak » Mon Feb 16, 2009 6:31 pm

Aelita wrote:'Sporking badfic'? Care to explain what that means?


Sorry, een spending too much time around the Kingdom Hearts crazies.

Have you ever seen Mystery Science theater 3000?
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Postby emoBillâ„¢ » Mon Feb 16, 2009 6:54 pm

No, but I don't see how that's relevant to the post xP

Are we spamming? We should probably move this to PM.
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Postby JesusFreak » Mon Feb 16, 2009 7:10 pm

No.

"Sporking" Is also known as MST ing.

Here's the trope page. http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/MST
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Postby emoBillâ„¢ » Mon Feb 16, 2009 8:10 pm

Aha. Don't worry, I do it to everyone. Whether it's exceptionally bad or average or exceptionally good.
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Postby JesusFreak » Tue Feb 17, 2009 4:51 pm

Yeah, well, you could totally do some MSTing with some snark and maybe another person.
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Postby emoBillâ„¢ » Tue Feb 17, 2009 6:06 pm

I have no idea what you mean, but anywho...

This story really does have potential. I just have some weird OCD that only affects certain parts of my life xP
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Postby Phoenix Wolf » Sat Feb 21, 2009 12:39 am

With a bit of work, this fic may have potential... But you might want someone to beta read it for grammar and spelling errors. On whole it is a good start...
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Postby emoBillâ„¢ » Sat Feb 21, 2009 11:13 am

Yeah, beta reading is always good. I'm up for it, but I don't have much spare time, so you'd have to wait a little while for each chapter.
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