need some help from some of you guys

[optimus304 offline]

im planing on writing a fanfic for season 5, only im not going to go someplace diffrent, no new characters. i wanna stay as true to the show as possible, so far ive told a few people my ideas and they thought it sounded pretty good, but i need some more advice, if i placed my ideas on here would you guys mind giving me some pointers

[Taelia offline]

I need some help with my fanfic project too, so you're not alone.

[optimus304 offline]

wanna help each other out maybe

[Taelia offline]

Maybe. Do you write stories well?

[Yumi Ulrich offline]

I'll help both of you!

[JesusFreak offline]

I will too!

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How?

[optimus304 offline]

well ask yumi ulrich thier, ive been helping him with a story for a while

so in that case these are my ideas,

the story starts with how and why waldo made the supercomputer, and how he met antea on the carthage project
thats kinda a back story

after that the story goes 6 months after season 4, Aelita is having more horrible nightmares only know she is constantly seeing jeremey die at the hands of a crimson black figure, at first the gang dosent think much of it till recent events lead the crew back to the factory, to discover a new replica, and that xana has survived extinction, and has spent these 6 months improving his armies. He now has a physical form, with a distinct wolf like look and feel, he has stronger monsters at his side as well, butthe catch is hes not on lyoko, hes on another supercomputer, and is now able to even leave the virtual world, he will have both a human form and a monster form, when the gang tries to stop him he reveals 8 super warriors, as strong as him, and with thier own unique personalites. soon though the orginazation that waldo worked for comes after aelita and jeremey, who is aslo neing sought after by the fbi, one agent who decides to help them later reveals to aelita and jeremey what xana might be after, and that another a.i. has been waging a war itself, and also reveals to aelita a grim secret,

basically thier will also be 4 other lyoko warriors, wiliam will be seeking retribution for all the trouble he caused the gang, sissi will join the fray, (still working on costume but weapn will be a kinda bow and arrow item) and two new kids, the story will still revolve around the gang against xana, but now they have to worry about the feds, the orginazation waldo worked for and this new A.I thing. but all in all the main heros are the kids, and main villian is xana.

leave me some feed back, im still working out the supercomputer that xana owns, and the final master computer, some things i might also cut but these are the things that so far are solid.

and taliea if you post your's il help you with what you have as well

and also sorry for any punctuation or spelling issues. my keyboard keeps messing up.

[Sithking Zero offline]

I'd be happy to do spell check. Sounds like a good plan.