Can we all forgive?

[YXUforever offline]

okay this is my first story so i hope you guys dont think it's to bad. I have to apolagize about my speeling and all that stuff too, because i suck at it. So forgive me people please. well here is a little bit about what the story is going to be about.

[Summery: She got pregnant by accident at 15 and it all started there. Yumi Ishiyama. story from getting pregnant, to giving birth to the baby, to abandoning the baby and now in search for her lost possestion, her baby. Since that night when Yumi abandoned her baby girl, Thuro Isiyama-Stern, everything has been going wrong. Now all she wants to do is get back all she lost. Meaning looking for Thuro, 14 years later! But allong the the way she thinks that her wish may have come to far because she finds herself falling in love again, but with the a mysterious man who turn out to an ex-boyfriend from the past, not to mension the lost baby's father!(Ulrich Stern) Can she start over? Will it all fall back together? Will she keep loving the mysterious man, ex-boyfriend, even though she's married with a man she has never actually love!? And most of all, will everyone be able to forgive one another?]

If you want me to post and keep going please tell me so i can post. Thanks

-meli

[yumi_yemimah offline]

The summary sound O.K

[Shark offline]

It's sounds great! Please continue!

[YXUforever offline]

okay thanks for posting. By the way this is rated teens. Nothin drastic just letting you guys know. okay well also this is my first story so pleaseeee bare with me peoples. (im desprate to know what you thin, lol) i know im pathetic..okay enough of that.



The lightning and thunder were the threat. She was positive it was going to rain. Now, She was getting worried. Only two things were heard. Mother nature, and the fast pasting footsteps of a 15 year old girl running down the street. The teen carried her most valuable possetion against her chest. Her month old baby girl, who was now waking up at the racket of her mothers movement. She started to cry. But the baby's cries were barely heard under a layer of hospital blankets she had recived on the days of the birth. Yumi seemed to be debating with herself. While holding her baby in one arm close the oher one was pincing her own skin, trying to put phisical painto replace her thoughts. She wondered up and down streets she has never seen before and let out little sobs, holding them back catiously, knowing if she started to cry, she will never stop. She fought with herself, as if saying "i should, or i shouldnt". The rain poured now mingling in her precious black messy hair and mixing with dirt on ger face leaving streaks on her face as the rain rolled past it. The babys crys were getting bigger. Yumi was to lost in though it notice. A life decision was being formed in her head. All of a sudden, the baby stopped crying. She had fallen asleep. Diamond had fallen asleep. Diamond sterm. After a few more blocks the plan was made. And yumi was scared of the actions that were comming to happen. She spotted a green house. A big green house. She opened the gate to it's enterence. She peered through a window that was next to the front door. She saw a couple. Middle age...'the perfect house' she though. Yumi placed Diamond the mat infront of the doorstep. She was still wrapped in blankets to keep the rain out of contact with her. Yumi revealed her baby girls face to herself. The little dark hair. her green eyes...like her fathers. her brown skin. That soft baby skin on her cheeks. She heard the little breaths that her baby breathed. So small. So tiny..so hopeless. She leaned in to her babys forhead, and kissed her cheeck. the baby shook a little in her sleep, when her moms lips touched hers. It sended goosebumps through Yumi. She covered her baby's face again. Rang the doorbell twice. Whispered"í love you' and ran into the street to hide behind a car. She saw the door open. A woman gave a delightful gasp. She picked up Diamond and looked around. When she spotted no one. She took Diamond inside, to show her husband the surprise that was on her doorstep. "Take care of her please"yumi said as she walked into the street. She didnt know if she was talking to herself as in telling the couple or just god..who she had not spoken to, since she was mad at god. For what has come out of her life. Yumi cried at the memorys and ran into the night. In pain...hurt...where to now?


okayyyy. I think i tried to hard. I just wrote this part now, because i dont have it saved in my computer and the notebook i had it written in is at home and im at school so sorry. Well please tell me what you htink

[Tekirai offline]

um k lyk first off...

u cant post storiez here lol u haf to post em sumwhere else lyk fanficshun.net or sumthin lol i dunno !

... I love April Fools. xD Sorry, but like I attempted to say, you can't post a story directly on the forum. Try a website, or the fanfiction databasey thingamabob we have here on the site somewhere.

[Mewberries151]

Ulrickfangrl is right. ^^; That is one of the rules here. I realize you're new here, but please make sure you're familiar with all of the rules here (as there are several ones rather unique to LF, such as fanfic linking and using correct spelling and grammar in one's posts).

If you could kindly link your fanfic within the next two days, that would be great, as otherwise we will have to lock this thread. Sorry.

[yumi_yemimah offline]

i liked the first part