Tim's Code Lyoko story 01

[sonictim2004 offline]

CODE LYOKO
story

Olrick takes Yumi to a restaurant a few minutes from the school to ask her out. The school year at the academy is nearly over now and Olrick is now about the same height as Yumi.


Olrick takes a deep breath and thinks for a moment ‘it’s now or never.’ His voice is shaky because he is nervous. He was shaking slightly, like when you have too much caffeine.
“Yumi there’s something I uh, want to ask you.â€

[Darkborn offline]

Meh, It's good. But there are things that bother me.

1) "Ulrich" is spelt wrong
2) The story has to be linked. It can't be posted directly.
3) "Sissy"=Sissi* I don't mind this one*
4) Jeremy=Jeremie*I don't mind this one too*

[Star Way]

You have two days to link to this, or else this will be locked. Sorry.

[sonictim2004 offline]

Meh, It's good. But there are things that bother me.

1) "Ulrich" is spelt wrong
2) The story has to be linked. It can't be posted directly.
3) "Sissy"=Sissi* I don't mind this one*
4) Jeremy=Jeremie*I don't mind this one too*

I must of failed to mention this was my FIRST STORY. I know ulrich is spelt wrong and it won't (or shouldn't) appear like that in future stories.

[Darkborn offline]

Ok, Ok. You don't have to yell at me. I have a habit of being a "Grammar Nazi" sometimes. I have the urge to correct everything.

[Overcaffeinated Sloth offline]

Yes. But still, the english language is a complicated series of random words. And to really understand it, you have to get everything perfect. Why do you think we have that spelling and grammer rule?

But I would highly suggest getting a livejournal or FanFiction.net account going. But for this case, Live Journal, because With FF.net, it takes three days to post a story. And somehow I don't thinkthree days can fit into a two day deadline. So as soon as it's put out in a link, the thread's locked.