The Sixth Station

[Snarky Jargon offline]

...something tells me I really should get working on my other stuff before starting something new, but I think I'll be a horrible person and do something new anyway. While I'm at it, I might as well advertise!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2681875/1/

The Sixth Station. I got inspired to write this little monster while reading the back of the Spirited Away soundtrack, so that's where the chapter titles and the title of the fan fic comes from.

The story itself is more of a drama/action/adventure/science fiction. Nothing in common with Spirited Away except for the names and such. XANA has taken over France, Jeremie and the gang go out to beat XANA, but first must run around in circles trying to figure things out. There is no romance, though there is a fair deal of pre-romance. The story should be nine chapters long, each chapter varying from 2,000 to 5,000 words. Unlike some of my friends, I've never been much of an epic person.

The good thing is, I have this all planned out. The bad thing is I'll get horribly dissatisfied with what I've planned in about two weeks. Better hurry and write my way into a corner so I can't change it, then!

Feedback is appreciated, constructive criticism welcome, etc. etc..

[YDV offline]

OH MY GOD!!! This is an awesome story so far! Well DONE! Wow... I think I absolutely love it. I've never read a story like this in.. well, a long time. I love your description of France as ruled by XANA.. the plot is very, very interesting. I think I have a sneaking suspicion of who's been contacting Jeremie... but still. Keep up the good work, and PLEASEEE update soon! *adds to favorites*

[Snarky Jargon offline]

Ahaha--um, wow. Thank you for the compliment.

Yeah, I noticed a lack of alternate universe fics in the section, and decided to throw myself at it. And... well, the identity of the person contacting Jeremie is completely blown in chapter two anyway.

Chapter two up, by the way.

[YDV offline]

Just read it-- just as awesome as the first. It's so... what's a good word for it... intriguing. Not quite the one I was goign for, but whatever.

Good points:

1. Jeremie elbowing Herb in the face! (I refuse to call him "Herve".. is that even a name?)

2, Franz = XANA = Lord XANA = not Franz = ???!?!?!

3. Ulrich playing the piano and the viola... character development!!

Bad points:

1. Sissi. Please. It's on the "Trombinoscope." Which, so far, has been 100% correct. "Sissy" is just like.. wrong...

But that's it. Very good overall. More, more, more! ^-^

[Snarky Jargon offline]

Heh. I've planned the story out before writing out, like I said in the first post. Unfortunately, that meant I wound up writing chapter two as a "filler" chapter. Chapter four is where, in my opinion, everything begins to kick in.

1. Go, Jeremie, use that elbow! And Herve is a real name--there's supposed to be an accent aigu over the last e. If you look at the Trombinoscope, that's how his name is listed.

2. ...okay. That author's note was worded poorly. Just means that Franz Hopper didn't get up one day and say, "You know, I'll call myself XANA."

3. YES. That was a scene I've wanted to write for ages. Also, it helps power one of the themes of the story.

BP1. Ehheh. I've never used the Trombinoscope to check up on the main characters' names, so that's probably the reason for the slip. Whoops. The later chapters will be updated appropriately, as well as one and two.

...just... after I sleep.